Personal Statement

[Superted]

So, I have to write a personal statement for uni and I've just copied the one over from last year with a bit of editting. However, last year all my chosen uni's rejected me so if you can find some flaw in my statement I'd greatly appreciate it, thank you.

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I am in the process of completing an access to higher education psychology course, last year I completed a course in sociology and critical skills for higher education.

I chose to apply for a combined course in Psychology and Philosophy because I have a great interest in the study of the mind, I have yet to choose a career aim.

Psychology partly appeals to me following my success in overcoming agoraphobia and depression as a teenager.

Outside college I am actively involved in my local youth group helping organize games and activities, I also work at a local charity shop serving customers. This has helped with the continued growth in my confidence as well as helping me develop my interpersonal skills.

Coming to college has also helped develop my confidence. I have also, out of necessity worked on time management skills and continue to prioritise my workload.

I am studying a wide range of topics within my access programme and I have particularly enjoyed learning about new theories and perspectives. I am looking forward to exploring these theories as they are applied to topics such as mental illness.

I relax by reading a wide range of media. I enjoy reading Pratchett and Asimov in particular and I also like to keep abreast of current affairs by keeping up with the news.

Having overcome some serious challenges in my life I am ready now to take my academic career forward. I am fully committed to completing my access course and would welcome the opportunity to continue my studies at degree level. I am hard working, conscientious and highly motivated. I hope you will find my application favourable.

[Ephemeral]

Under 'Personal Growth' put 'many hardons'...that always cracks them up.

[Wil]

I recommend sending your ucas form of as soon as possible, Unis prefer taking people who are organised and dont leave sending at the last minute.

Talk about how you went to an under-acheiving school and you've had to work especially hard to get to where you are.

And its a bit short, sell yourself some more !

[Fair]

agreed send em some money to seal the deal

[Jeenyuss]

Lie about it

[Golden Sun 1]

First off u gotta bum urself up make urself sound good, no one else is gonna do it for u, rite more about urself, twist the truth abit. cut some of the crap stuff out like "im yet to choose a carrer", instead say summit like "i would like to go into..", u havent made up ur mind but ur still not completely blank about it, because if ur not sure about ur carrer, wot makes u sure about the course ur applying for.
"I also work at a local charity shop serving customers." far too vague, infact most of the paragraphs are too short. bulk it up abit

Basically big urself up, lie abit, extend the truth and dont put any negatives in there

[project dragon]

Comming is spelled with two m's.

Never had to do a personal statement for university, but it sounds to me it's kind of like a resume.

suck up to the university. if its just a generic statement for universities, just add positive attributes about universities in general.

Your paragraphs are awfully tiny. Your topics are pretty good but i suggest beefing up the paragraphs (but dont tell a story, keep it to the point) and try to beef yourself up as well, don't sound like everyone else.

are they tiny because there is a word limit? come to think of it I did have to write a personal statement for Queens for concurrent education. The problem with my writing is that I tend to repeat myself a lot (which you do not seem to have that problem) and I had tripled the amout of words that was allowed. Took quite a while for me to shorten it to the given limit.

Also, do you need references along with your statement? If so, I suggest teachers of previous employers. Don't go for members of your Churches (like a priest is going to say bad things about you), but instead go for reference of people who are somewhat involved in the field you are going into (I am a music major so my references was my high school music teacher and my saxophone instructor). Sometimes a good reference can do wonders for you.

Good luck on this, I hope you get into the program/university you want =)

[NaiLed]

- although you haven't chosen to have a gap year, you are planning to go backpacking when you're done with uni

- you did APAUS

- you are looking forward to uni because of the independance, and the meeting of other people

[NaiLed]

Comming is spelled with two m's.

no it's not

[ConcreteSchlyrd]

Comming is spelled with two m's.

No, it isn't.

[Theif of Time]

Be aware that psychology has a statistics requirement (at least here), so if you are math-phobic you may want to reconsider.

[Mr. Peanuts]

Yeah I'm currently writing mine too, I'm saying all this crap about how I've always felt constrained by high school and college level ICT and would like to do something more specific to my passions and blahblahblah. It's pissing me off that i have to apply for uni now and i still have all this work too.

bbl cod2

[Facetious]

i dont know how they respond to stuff like that in your country, but here i think itd be a major turn off for a college to read anything about past psycological problems. you could MAYBE say that you are working on your confidence, but to mention the agorophobia and depression could by itself keep you out of college here. nevermind the fact that the entire statement seems to revolve around the depression. perhaps at this stage in your life, you feel like overcoming depression is a theme, but id keep it out of the college application process. you dont have to lie, i just dont think you should mention it specifically. also, i think to say youre interested in psychology BECAUSE youve had problems would be a specific turnoff to those departments.

[scumbag]

this personal statement is pissin me off, catn think what to write and when i do, its usually just this long line of bullshit

there has to be an easier way

[Rab]

u start by saying u dont know what ur career is, and u end by saying u wanna forward ur career.