Essay Review

[Fit of Rage]

I'm writing an essay for a pertinant scholarship. This essay needs some revision but I'm not quite sure how to go about it. If you're interested in giving constructive critiscism to it, please post your e-mail and I'll send you a copy. You can save it and make any revisions in red type.

I'd like to reiterate that this is a very important essay. As such please reply only if you have a firm grasp of the english language. This isn't to discriminate in any way, I would just like to make it the best essay possible, when some forum users can't even write in complete sentences.

A great deal of thanks in advance,

Fit

[PaulOakenfold]

Hi Fit of Rage, I'm talking to you about this on MSN right now.

[Hero*]

Hi Fit of Rage, I'm talking to you about this on MSN right now.

OMGosh so am I!!!! I said no to him though ask a friend or a teacher to do it for you, itd be better if a teached did it though, like and english teacher

[Hairygroin]

I'll help. I do quite a bit of writing for my hobby.

email me at reyawn@comcast.net!

[Troll King]

Could you give us an idea about what instructions you were given for this essay. That would help us to make sure that you're responding effectively to the task. Did they ask you a specific question or give you a particular topic?

[Fit of Rage]

Good point. The topic was "How does your American dream (or life dream, really) compare with that of your parents?"

[Hairygroin]

k I sent back the edited version, hope I helped!

[Selex]

Hi Fit of Rage, I'm talking to you about this on MSN right now.

Hah, I knew you were gay.

OMGosh so am I!!!! I said no to him though ask a friend or a teacher to do it for you, itd be better if a teached did it though, like and english teacher

Eww!! I just talked to you on MSN too, sexy.. (To hero... Not FOR)

[za gophar]

Good point. The topic was "How does your American dream (or life dream, really) compare with that of your parents?"

lol nice topic.. i could write like infiniti pages on that. post it here and i might read it.

[Fit of Rage]

The reason I didn't is because a lot of people would just skim it and throw back mindless garbage. Anyone who really wants to give me some criticism just has to post their email and I can email it to them promptly. It's more personal that way.

[za gophar]

well i have my own paper to write and i have neither the time nor attention span to email someone

[DoTheFandango]

dothefandango@gmail.com

[Troll King]

Edited and returned.

[Rab]

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[ZeUs!!]

well i have my own paper to write and i have neither the time nor attention span to email someone

Sorry Fit, this is the harsh reality for most people