My Personal Statement

[Pressure Drop]

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3) yea
4) hmmm
5) time
6) as a person who has had to do the same thing albeit 6-7 years ago i r wise on this
ok yea
hmmm
i'm just in from bar so i'm a bit drunk and confused

1) didn't actually read your personal statement
2) in my experience personaly statement doesn't mean shit ...
3) when i did it your teachers did one as well as you and thats the one that counted more
4) you can go "yea i r better than god and do charity 4 funners!" your teacher goes " hes a bit slow" .... which holds more wieght ?
5) so don't stress about it, you're grades count first, your teacher next and your statement last ... loads of unis just offer high grades (although when i did my a levels it was tougher !)
6) think of the admin to read all those personal stetements ... they don't care that much , specially when loads apply to 6 courses and only really want 2-3 ... imagine that accross the board
7) yea
8) short and sweet baby

[DoTheFandango]

Well, I have mine too if you guys are willing to look for stuff?

It's right here.

[Pummel]

hm

As well as teaching me English language skills, my subjects have also taught me other skills.

Through help from my subjects, my understanding of the English language has increased dramatically, English along with many other skills.

Just a suggestion. To me, "Through help from my subjects" Doesn't sound quite proper..

[Pummel]

hm

EDIT 2: You said: "I regularly play football, as well as sometimes jog to keep myself fit."

I would change that to: "I play football no a regular basis, and jog occasionally in order to maintain good physical fitness."

Not sure if good is the right word there, perhaps replace 'good' with 'a healthy level of'.

Thus leaving:

I play football on a regular basis, and jog occasionally in order to maintain a healthy level of physical fitness."

[Pummel]

hm

It is mostly though because our high school system is different.

Brain...Good....

[Ward]

Nailed, your vocabulary is meek and your sentence structure is very primitive..

[NaiLed]

your face is primitive

[Suh]

your face is primitive

hahaha "your face"

i say that atleast once a day in one way or another

[Ward]

your face is primitive

Hey dude, don't take this the wrong way. I wasn't refering to YOU, but only your statement. I'm only trying to help and I believe you could do a much better job by incorporating your writing with abstract sentence structures and words beyond usual use. After all, you're going to have to impress to get in. No offense meant, so relax, I'm only saying what I think. After all, that's the motive of this thread.

[Exalt]

my personal statement for uni:


tips + ideas very welcome

sounds like a lot of BS that you just made up to get into your college of choice. but colleges love bs, so it works


you sound like the typical foreign college student, all that bs you wrote willb e down the drain after a few weeks of frat partys and beer bongs

on top of that you said you enjoy sport? fishing and snooker arnt sports, at least not in my mind. thats like saying chess is a sport

[Suh]

Naileds personal statement

when i did mine i was just really frank with them, pointed out what i disliked about psychology, how i think certain things should change and my utter contempt for some areas of the subject, but in a like "want to change things" kinder way.

i suspect it made me stand out from the crowd good or bad im sure they liked that

and atleast it didnt start out like so many others did:-

"hi, i like <insert whatever here>, its a really good subject, really gets me going blah blah blah and i also like to play guitar and socialise.

the sport thing is good, unis love sports people, they snapped me up for netball pretty quick.

the reading thing is also good relates to your subject, i said id regularly sit in a busy area with friends and people watch.

best advice make it stand out, although im not sure how you could do that with your subject

it worked for me and i was predicted way lower than what i got and i still got a place (beat out 900 people for it to).

i hope that kinder helps.

-Suh